基础英语写作记叙文.ppt

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1、基础写作训练-记叙文基础写作训练-记叙文基础写作讲评假如你在春节期间到北京大学参加了一个为期十天的冬令营活动。以下是你参加本次活动期间所写的部分日记摘要。[写作内容]你拟向一英文杂志“我与奥运”栏目投稿，请根据日记内容写一篇短文介绍本次活动的内容及你的感受。你的稿件需包括以下五方面的内容：1.本次活动的概况（名称、时间、地点）；2.介绍校内活动的内容；3.介绍校外活动的内容；4.概述你对本次活动的总体感受；5.你对本次活动的建议并阐述原因。[写作要求]1.只能使用5个句子表达全部内容；2.文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。[评分标准]句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章结构连贯。[试题分析]体裁主

2、体时态主体人称整合信息记叙文一般过去时第一人称1.本次活动的概况（名称、时间、地点)2.介绍校内活动的内容；(Day1&Day3)3.介绍校外活动的内容；(Day2)4.概述你对本次活动的总体感受；5.你对本次活动的建议并阐述原因。教训：写作之前一定要看清写作内容学生习作分析存在问题：主要在语言表达方面。1.时态错误2.单词短语错误3.有些句型用的比较好，如notonly…butalso;because;which定语从句；sothat.但整体读起来仍然让人感觉比较平淡短语复习在春节期间为期十天的冬令营活动关于奥运会历史的讲座有点闷,枯燥体育场大十倍开阔视野户外活动duringthesp

3、ringfestivalaten-daywintercampalectureonOlympicGamesHistoryalittleboringsportsstadiumtentimesbiggerthanbroadenone’shorizons.outdooractivities句型修改1.DuringthespringfestivalIattendedaten-daywintercampinBeijingUniversity.2.WelistenedtoalectureonthehistoryofOlympichistoryandhadEnglishlessons.3.Thelecture

4、wasboring,butIfeelveryhappybecauseitbroadenmyhorizons.4.IalsohopethattherearemoreoutdooractivitiessothatwecanknowmoreaboutBeijing.句型增分修改1.DuringthespringfestivalIattendedaten-daywintercampatBeijingUniversity.（Itis/was…that..强调句型）2.WelistenedtoalectureonthehistoryofOlympichistoryandhadEnglishlessons.

5、（notonly…butalso…倒装句型）ItwasinBeijingUniversitythatIattendedaten-daywintercampduringthespringfestivalNotonlydidwelistentoalectureonOlympicGamesHistorybutalsohadEnglishlessons.3.Thelecturewasboring,butIfeelveryhappybecauseitbroadenmyhorizon.（形容词+as+主语+谓语，倒装句）4.Ialsohopethattherearemoreoutdooractivitie

6、ssothatwecanknowmoreaboutBeijing.（被动语态）Boringasthelecturewas,Ienjoyedmyselfbecausemostoftheactivitieswereinterestingandtheybroadenedmyhorizons.IdohopethatmoreoutdooractivitiesshouldbeorganizedsothatwecanknowmoreaboutBeijing.修改后的作文ItwasinBeijingUniversitythatIattendedaten-daywintercampduringthespring

7、festival.NotonlydidwelistentoalectureonOlympicGamesHistorybutalsohadEnglishlessons.HowexcitedIwaswhenwevisitedanewsportsstadium,whichistentimesbiggerthanourschool!Generallyspeaking,boringasthelecturew